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　今天是ZhuHui故事讲的是,一个学生从深圳。他现在在美国学习。他是一个美国家庭一起生活在纽约。今天是端午节。这是9:00a.m。和ZhuHui是家人在家。他的妈妈和阿姨是做粽子。他的爸爸和叔叔是　　在电视上看比赛一般。
是ZhuHui还看比赛和吃粽子吗?嗯,它is9:00p.m。在纽约,和它是节日的前一晚。但是没有一个端午节在美国,所以它就像任何其他的夜晚Zhuhui和他的寄宿家庭。母亲是念故事给她的孩子。父亲是在电视上看足球比赛。和什么是ZhuHui在干什么?他正在讲电话,他的表哥在深圳。ZhuHui想念自己的家庭,希望有他的妈妈是美味的粽子。ZhuHui喜欢纽约和他的寄宿家庭很多,但仍然有“没有地方像家一样”
回答者：teacher077
应该是Today's story is about ZhuHui.
翻译：今天的故事是关于朱辉，——一个来自深圳的学生的故事。他现在在美国学习。他借住在纽约的一个美国家庭。今天是端午节。现在是上午九点，朱辉的家人都在家。他的妈妈和阿姨正在包粽子。他爸爸和叔叔电视上看龙舟比赛。
朱辉也在看电视，吃粽子么？现在是纽约时间节前晚上九点。但是在美国没有端午节，所以对于朱辉和他寄宿的家庭来说这一晚与平时并无区别。这家的女主人正在为她年幼的孩子们读故事。男主人在电视上看足球赛。朱辉在做什么呢？他在跟深圳的表哥打电话。朱辉想念他的家庭，希望能够迟到妈妈包的美味的粽子。朱辉很喜欢美国以及他寄宿的家庭，但是却没有家的归属感。
回答者：teacher069
今天的故事是关于饭店，一个来自深圳的学生。他现在在美国学习。他在纽约的一个美国家庭的生活。今天是端午节。这是下午9:珠晖是全家都在家。他的妈妈和阿姨做粽子。他的父亲和叔叔在电视上看比赛的头。是珠晖也看竞渡和吃粽子？嗯，这is9:点纽约，它是在节日前的晚上。但没有一个端午节在美国，所以它像珠晖和他的寄宿家庭的任何一个夜晚。母亲对她的孩子读一个故事。父亲正在看电视上的足球比赛。什么是珠晖做？他在他的表弟在shenzhen.zhuhui电话想念家人，希望他的妈妈美味的粽子。珠晖喜欢纽约和他的寄宿家庭很多，但仍有“没有地方像家一样” 这个故事关于朱辉，一个来着深圳的学生，现在在美国，住在纽约的一个美国人家庭里，今天是龙舟节，现在早上9点，他的家人都在家中，他的妈妈和阿姨在包粽子，他的爸爸和叔叔在看电视上的龙舟比赛。 你初中生？ 这不是英语书的吗，初一的吧。。

麻烦各位英语高手帮我看看这篇文章有什么语法等方面的问题，顺便告诉我该如何修改，谢谢！

My vacationrn I had a scary but interesting summer vacation.My parents and I went to Hainan by plane.It was very fast.After getting there,the weather is hot,and a number of people were wore shoes and T-shirt.rn The first day,we went to a restaurant and ate some seafood like fish,octopus.They were delicious.rn On the second day,the weather still hot.We went to the sea.My parents went swimming .But I went diving in the sea and played the beach volleyball.We were tired but happy.Then we went to the hotel.We played gobang and relaxing there for two hours.After that,we take a ship on the sea,when I looked out of a really shark.I were so scaried that I couldnx27t move.Luckily,the shark was quickly left.rn The third day,my parents and I visited friends.They were very friendly.And they with we went to visited a museum.It was very big.And I saw some kinds of butterflies.They were very beautiful.And I learned a lot of their living habits.We were surprise.rn When we there ,time goes quickly.It is time for leaving there.And I think Hainan was a good place to have fun.I hope to go Hainan again.

"坐飞机"，一般不用by plane这种说法，这是明显的中国式英语。老外一般用by air。即我和爸妈坐飞机去海南这句改为：my parents and I went to Hainan by air.

fast 不用来形容旅途的快捷，又是中国式英语。你想表达的是坐飞机很快，用it was very quick比较好。

因为天气热这句话，你不能直接放在里面，因为是单独的句子了，你必须加连接词。

改为：After getting there,because of the hot weather,a number of ......(去掉and）。

第一天，应该是On the first day,你少了一个on。

fish和octopus之间最好加个and。即：

ate some seafood like fishs and octopus.

 第二天，天气依旧很热。你少了be动词。On the second day ,the weather WAS still hot.

play volleyball,不需要the。paly soccer ，play tennis。。。球类运动都不要加定冠词。

We played gobang and relaxing there for two hours这句应该改为We played gobang and relaxed there for two hours。

After that,we take a ship on the sea,when I looked out of a really shark这句应该改为we took a ship at sea ,and I founded out a real shark.错误太多，首先take应该是过去式，然后，发现一条鲨鱼用的短语应该是found out ，而不是look out。look out 是小心的意思。最后，真的鲨鱼是real shark，不是really shark ，really不做形容词。

And they with we went to visited a museum.这句改为And they visited a museum with me.去参观博物馆直接用visit就行了，干嘛要用go to visit ，老外不会这么说英语。with me 不能放在they的后面。

And I learned a lot of their living habits应该是learn a lot about their living habits。这里用learn about 更好。

We were surprise这里你想表达我们都震惊了，应该用surprised。不是surprise，这是动词不是形容词。

差不多就这些，简单给你改改，基本每句话都有错，你的英语还需要努力学习。

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下面这个高中材料作文题~~~ 麻烦各位帮忙指导一下作文构思角度

麻烦各位列举一些下面这作文的构思角度，越多约好！rn材料：下面是某次地理知识竞赛时关于“雨极”（雨水最充沛）问题的一番问答：rnrn“地球上有个年降水最多的地方，人称‘雨极’，它叫什么？”rnrn——“乞拉朋齐。”rnrn “乞拉朋齐在哪儿”？rnrn——“应该在印度。”rnrn“为什么会在印度？”rnrn——“印度属于热带季风气候，西南季风强劲时，印度洋的暖湿气流给那里带来世界上最充沛的雨水。”rnrn“印度半岛沿海地区都可以受到西南季风的影响，为什么只有乞拉朋齐成为雨极呢？”rnrn“因为乞拉朋齐位于山地迎风坡，暖湿气流在抬升过程中，在这里形成了地形雨。是非常适宜的气候条件与得天独厚的地理条件的结合，成就了乞拉朋齐‘雨极’的美誉。”rnrn要求：rnrn选一个角度构思作文，自主确定立意，确定文体，确定标题。不要脱离材料作文，不要套作，不得抄袭，不少于800字。rn谢谢！！ 这道题可从哲学角度去思考写作,第一事物都带有普遍的一面又有独特性,地形雨只要有迎风坡就会产生地形雨这是普遍性,事物往往又有独特性,强而湿的西南风,面对度洋,前面是低平的恒河平原,
的特殊地理位置,有一定海拨高度的山峰,事物的
发展变化又有内因和外因作用,这里的内因是特殊的地理位置和地形而湿热的西南风则是外因,文章可从这一思路入手去阐述。

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麻烦各位帮忙检查一下这篇托福作文的语法错误，谢谢！！

When it comes to whether we should require young students to study art and music, the answers of many people may be negative. Because they believe that young children should be taught art courses only when they are interested in it; furthermore, even some parents regard music as merely a waste of time since they hope their children could get high scores and attend a fancy university. However, as far as I’m concerned, I definitely believe that art and music courses should be added into the syllabus of elementary and middle schools and there are two main reasons I would point out below.rn First of all, mastering a skill of art is extremely beneficial to young people. For example, through performing in front of many audience, a child can build his confidence and strengthen his courage. Besides, playing musical instruments such as guitar and piano can certainly change a bad mood. I used to play guitar when I was tired or depressed and it would not be long before I felt joyful and energetic again. Therefore, I believe that music can really adjust my mood and cheer me up.rnSecondly, although it is true that only those who are interested in arts can finally have a great achievement on it, we may not know about whether our children are into arts or not unless we let them be involved in arts at first. As we all know that because there was no chance to be introduced to music at a young age, many people find themselves are extremely obsessed with music when they grow into adults. If we let them have music lessons when they were young, who can say that they wouldn’t be great musicians in the future? On the other hand, musician is a greatly admirable career and lots of people have made quite a fortune from it.rnIn conclusion, I strongly suggest that young students should be required to learn music and art, because this would benefit a lot to both themselves and the whole society in the future. Anyway, we don’t want to miss any chance to cultivate great musicians for our society. 你整篇文章写的很出色，可见语言功底确实了得！
只有极个别失误，或需要替换的表达（原来的表达也不错），在此注出，权作商榷和学习——
When it comes to whether we should require young students to study art and music, the answers of many people may be negative. Because they believe that young children should be taught art courses only when they are interested in it; furthermore, even some parents regard music as merely a waste of time since they hope their children 【could——can】 get high scores and attend【 a fancy——an ideal】 university. However, as far as I’m concerned, I definitely believe that art and music courses should be added into the syllabus of elementary and middle schools 【and there are two main reasons I would point out below原文也正确，只是用了并列句，使句意衔接不那么紧密.——for such two main reasons as follows 用动词搭配 do sth for ...reason】
First of all, mastering a skill of art is extremely beneficial to young people. For example, through performing in front of many audience, a child can build his confidence and strengthen his courage. Besides, playing musical instruments such as guitar and piano can certainly change a bad mood. I used to play guitar when I was tired or depressed and it would not be long before I felt joyful and energetic again. Therefore, I believe that music can really adjust my mood and cheer me up.
Secondly, although it is true that only those who are interested in 【arts 文科；艺术 ——art 避免歧义】can finally have a great achievement on it, we may not know about whether our children are into arts or not unless we let them be involved in 【arts——art】 at first. 【As we all know as 引导的非限制性定语从句】, 【that 去掉】because there was no chance to be introduced to music at a young age, many people find themselves 【are去掉，用find的复合结构 】extremely obsessed with music when they 【grow ——have grown 完成时态，语义表达更充分准确】into adults. If we let them have music lessons when they were young, who can say that they wouldn’t be great musicians in the future? On the other hand, 【musician 音乐家，与后面的career 词义冲突——music】 is a greatly admirable career and lots of people have made quite a fortune from it.
In conclusion, I strongly suggest that young students should be required to learn music and art, because this would benefit a lot to both themselves and the whole society in the future. Anyway, we don’t want to miss any chance to cultivate great musicians 【and artists添加，以便于上面的music and art 对应】for our society.
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